1) The pitch.
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
Clear and direct speech stood out to me as important
What feedback surprised you the most : I have the potential to expand the business from originally only students into people living in Florida because it is an online platform
What feedback you think was outright wrong or silly : Not enough passion
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
I have changed the target customers from "students" into "people living in Florida"
I have also added a brief description of what bubble tea is so as to give the listeners a better idea and understanding of the new product.
Hey Wan-ting. Your elevator pitch was great. Although I haven't seen your previous pitches, I think your speech was very clear and direct, and you described your idea perfectly. The description was very helpful and I think really high lights your venture. If you want to see my post, it can be found here: http://entblogemilytreasure.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
ReplyDeleteHi Wendy, I like your idea, people are always looking to try new drinks (tea especially) and delivering to their door would make it very convenient. It would be hard to expand your business throughout Florida without first setting up several locations, which could get expensive. My only advice is to eliminate fillers like "um" when delivering your pitch. If you have time, check out my blog here: http://jakeryanentrepreneur.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
ReplyDeleteWendy, I'm not really much of a tea drinker but I like the way you presented this idea. I think you can go far with it and I think that your elevator pitches have defiantly improved from the feedback you have received. Grate post heres a link to my blog:http://rtcgator.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no3.html
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